Ah, okay, thanks very much! I guess this is just one of those times that I have been known for in the past in which I totally underestimate how horrific or depressing I made something... A ha ha ^^;;
Since you're open to questions-- thanks very much, you see, I don't have a beta so I just type and throw it out there, so I dearly appreciate feedback from readers--
In the interests of editing, posting off of LJ, and writing parts two and three... How did you perceive the very first section? This is the section I was trying to make humorous and apparently failed epically at. My intent was to paint the situation lightly, paralleling with Edward's denial, and then drop suddenly into the second section, which, being morbid and tear-jerking, outlines the reality of the situation. But since it did not go according to plan, what did you think of this first section? Did you find it hindering or a good lead-in? In character, out of character? Necessary or unnecessary? If it isn't funny, does it at least keep the piece somewhat canonical (which sometimes views things lightly before dealing more seriously)? Does it keep the piece from being dreary or too heavy? Or is it just tedious and strange?
Questions questions questions. Sorry for the trouble.
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Date: 2012-01-18 05:28 am (UTC)Since you're open to questions-- thanks very much, you see, I don't have a beta so I just type and throw it out there, so I dearly appreciate feedback from readers--
In the interests of editing, posting off of LJ, and writing parts two and three... How did you perceive the very first section? This is the section I was trying to make humorous and apparently failed epically at. My intent was to paint the situation lightly, paralleling with Edward's denial, and then drop suddenly into the second section, which, being morbid and tear-jerking, outlines the reality of the situation. But since it did not go according to plan, what did you think of this first section? Did you find it hindering or a good lead-in? In character, out of character? Necessary or unnecessary? If it isn't funny, does it at least keep the piece somewhat canonical (which sometimes views things lightly before dealing more seriously)? Does it keep the piece from being dreary or too heavy? Or is it just tedious and strange?
Questions questions questions. Sorry for the trouble.